My new idea ( song )

[Riff_Lovely]

Hello guys, my new idea. I wanted to insert keyboards to make it sound more mystical, but it didn't turn out well at all (I don't know how to play them, but I tried to convey something as if I were playing a guitar), that's why the outro is longer. Here are the words of the song translated to Google translate, for those few who do not know Croatian

Love is a dungeon
I burn in its darkness
Chained with heavy chains
Condemned to eternity

Love is a dungeon
I can't hear the birds singing
And only when I close my eyes
I can see the light of day

REF.
There used to be a river
Now the trough is empty
I stand there under the sun
Now it's a desert

Love is a dungeon
They don't have a door that has a key
Without sky and sun
Shadows lurk from the walls

Love is a dungeon
Silence in the ears
Just the clanking of chains
I know the sun is shining outside

REF
There used to be a river
Now the trough is empty
I stand there under the sun
Now it's a desert

OUTRO
Love is a dungeon
In that darkness
Touch is food
Love is water

[youtube]https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=tqH379_sU8g[/youtube]

[mklankin@hotmail.com]

Riff

Thanks for sharing this catchy new song idea. Good mix, your classic background vox are there & nice, gritty guitar sounds! Too bad about the keyboard idea not panning out but I think, for all of us, ideas come to mind but execution can be a challenge or you track it and then find out it’s not as ideal as you thought.

Thanks for also sharing the lyrics as I think they are really strong…good stuff!

Great idea!
Michael


BTW - I think I’m finally getting close to posting that rock song!

[mklankin@hotmail.com]

Hey Riff,

Thanks for the quick listen and feedback, really glad u enjoyed it, I owed you one!

Nope, I wouldn’t change what you’re doing, man. You have some really good ideas and I’m always keen to press play when you’ve posted something. We all are gonna have different sounds and a good song idea will shine through regardless of the production value.

Glad to hear it wasn’t just me that couldn’t log into the Forum recently….and that it seems to be resolved.

All the best and thanks for the support!!!
Michael