Lost in translation

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Lost in translation

Postby Riff_Lovely » Sat Dec 03, 2022 4:36 pm

Hello everybody.
I try to wrote song on english. I wrote one simple song, so i want to knew is this grammarly and phrazes ok. I need help with this. Thank in advance.
Lyrics:
Ver.
I wanna live my dream
Like a child i want to scream
I want to live like there is no tomorrow
Wanna (try) forget all my sorrow
REF.
I want it all now
I want world now
VERSE
I chase him trought narrow streets
When i look at him increse my heart beats
When i catch him i will hold him tight
Grab him like little child

REF.
I want it all now
I want world now

Outro
I want it
I want it
Now
I want it
I want it
All
Riff_Lovely
 
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Re: Lost in translation

Postby mklankin@hotmail.com » Sat Dec 03, 2022 5:13 pm

Hey zuga!

Great to see you're working on the song in English. Here is what I would propose, depending on tense and how you want to say it....and, of course, how if fits the music. Words in (brackets) may be alternates or not needed. Anyhow, here goes:

Verse
I wanna live my dream
Like a child I want to scream
I want to live like there is no tomorrow
Wanna (try to) forget all my sorrow

REF.
I want it all now
I want the world now

VERSE
I chase him through narrow streets
When I look at him (increase)/increasing/increased (my) heart beats
When I catch him I will hold him tight
Grab him like a little child

REF.
I want it all now
I want the world now

Outro
I want it
I want it
Now
I want it
I want it
All

Look forward to your post of the song! 8-)
Take care and all the best,
Michael
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Re: Lost in translation

Postby Riff_Lovely » Sat Dec 03, 2022 10:09 pm

Thanks a lot Michael. I am not good at grammary. :) THX.
I will try in next few days .
Riff_Lovely
 
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