Lost in translation

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Lost in translation

Postby Riff_Lovely » Sat Dec 03, 2022 4:36 pm

Hello everybody.
I try to wrote song on english. I wrote one simple song, so i want to knew is this grammarly and phrazes ok. I need help with this. Thank in advance.
Lyrics:
Ver.
I wanna live my dream
Like a child i want to scream
I want to live like there is no tomorrow
Wanna (try) forget all my sorrow
REF.
I want it all now
I want world now
VERSE
I chase him trought narrow streets
When i look at him increse my heart beats
When i catch him i will hold him tight
Grab him like little child

REF.
I want it all now
I want world now

Outro
I want it
I want it
Now
I want it
I want it
All
Riff_Lovely
 
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Re: Lost in translation

Postby Cabezon_IK » Fri Dec 09, 2022 10:51 pm

Hello there,

Well, for the most part it's all pretty much correct.

Not to mention; pending on the rhythmic aspect of the song would determine what words would be best to use at what time.

But here is a slightly revised version from a purely grammatical standpoint:

Revised Lyrics:

Verse.
I wanna live my dream
Like a child, I want to scream
I want to live like there is no tomorrow
Wanna (try) forget all my sorrow

REF.
I want it all now
I want this world now

VERSE
I chase him throughout narrow streets
When I look at him, increased my heart beats
When I catch him I will hold him tight
Grab him like little child

REF.
I want it all now
I want this world now

Outro
I want it
I want it
Now
I want it
I want it
All
Cabezon_IK
 
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